Thursday, October 15, 2009

Gogyohka 10.15.09

Everything singing water
The rain popping
on the blue tarp
The slick shish of car tires
The kettle water turning into steam

two doors down
old man swindled
out of his house
child-sized Winnie the Pooh
face down on wet concrete


Lorri Lambert-Smith said...

I like the first one as it's written and also with the first line last.

Mushroom said...

Vanity is wonderful. A great dramatic moment.

Mushroom said...

Why not cut the "the" in first poem about the water. second poem has really hard edges. good job.